teimutm's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Did You Hear That?]

Wow!

I'm extremely impressed. Incredibly innovative!

It's a collage on the interpretation of sound!

Graeme responds:

I like your description :)
Thanks

[DMT:How to read music/tab]

Nice

Well done.

I saw this more as an information delivery foundation, rather than a music/tab tutorial. Honestly, you could put anything in there, and that's the beauty. You potentially have a very sleek, web2.0, way to tell people about anything.

BUG: running through sheet music, then tablature leaves you with a menu button to click on. clicking this takes you back to the menu, but another instance of the music starts again over the original. a bit distracting.

Your main menu was more much nicely animately than the rest of the slides. i'd like it if this was consistent.

You intermingle text and images that contain text. this seems inconsistent.

im no musician, but perhaps someone learned something? i mean, don't they make whole books on this stuff? i'd say you were a bit too concise, in which case explaining this topic might not be appropriate for a flash movie.

remember your audience too. this is a fine display of work, but are people getting any utility out of it? There's probably not too many people coming to NG looking for this. SURE, there are some, but imo, not enough to make it worth while. it seems like you got a webpage. put this on there.

Darkmaster603 responds:

Well, I agree that not many people come here looking for this in particular, 95% of my reviews are thanks for making this, because they either got a refresher in music or are getting into music and it's helping them. This was mainly for my site, but I thought it would be a good idea to upload here too.

I also agree that the tutorial could have had more animation done to it, but I kinda rushed through this. The next one I will get into more details graphically.

For the music problem, I've added that stop music button

I think your right about a lot of things, but the point was to make a interesting and unique tutorial on how to read music/tab. That was my goal, and from the reviews I'm reading, I think I accomplished it.

Thanks for the review, and criticism!

[The Duders: Sword Shavin']

alright

the drawing and animations were your strong suit here. very well done.

i thought your voice acting could have been a bit more expressive though. didn't seem very real.

and unfortunately, because of that, your humor came off a bit weakly. put more emotion to those characters, i'd say. i wanted to believe i was really there smoking a that joint with you (trust me, o how i wish i was), but it felt like some dudes reading from a script.

ill definitely be looking out for more of your stuff.

TheCriminalDuder responds:

I agree - Jay and the "purple box" didn't have much emotion to 'em. They were both leaving for a while and I caught them to do voice acting just before they left and they were both actually pretty tired from lack of sleep the night before.
I felt I did pretty good on my part and Justin as well. I'll see if I can put more emotion into and improve my voice acting.

Huge thanks on the compliment to my art and animation - I spent nearly all of '08 tryin' to improve that. :3

[Black Father's Evolution]

4 years old

would you have done it the same way if you had to create it again today?

there was definitely room for improvement. your screen effects weren't very effective, and the drawing could definitely be touched up. coloring could be more representative. subtitles were a bit pathetic--use your voice. flash is a multimedia...use it.

the audience's sudden immersion in this plot was a bit confusing.

author's comments cannot excuse this. if you thought it was lacking in some respects, why even submit it all? why not be proud of your work? to me, the real question would have been, do i need to re-do this to represent my skills, ideas, etc, of today? a noob could create this today, and ok, fine, but im sure you've moved up in abilities.

also, i could care less about your statistics about frames and objects at the end. what, do you want a cookie because how hard you worked? or how hard you think you worked?

do you know what "swords touching" refers to in the US btw?

black-father responds:

i'd prefer subtitles than my voice since it fits my movies more. in my previous movies (one of them submitted in NG), i used my voiceacting.. everybody said to me not to use my voice coz it was horrible!!

second paragraph: i just like to show everything i did... not just the best thing.. some of my friends prefer my old animations more than the new ones..

i want a cookie because i worked hard!!! happy now or not??

about the "swords touching" i don't know what it is refered to in US??

[Best Of J Dilla Tribute]

better as a youtube

im going to overlook that this may be a sensitive subject for you and critique normally.

your style was consistent and strong. informative text. i happened to like the music.

unfortunately, this piece doesn't really work as a flash. probably would have been better as a video. there was nowhere you really utilized flash in a flash-unique way. maybe give some nav menus?

HipHop915 responds:

i actually orginally intended to put it on youtube, but for some reason the wmm doesnt import my music, and i think flash is neater and easier to use anyways
yeah i might try that, thanks anyways

[My Piece of Crap Project]

provides a 7th graders take on global warming

come on now. do you think people come to NG looking for something like this?

big blocks of text, btw, are difficult to read on screen. especially with that darn scrolling system you came up with. break your paragraphs up into simple concise points.

your writing didn't provide much insight to the problem, and it was obvious that this was a project.

sorry bud, you asked for it.

MycroShaft responds:

Well no duh, i said it was a piece of crap. I made that thing 2 years ago, what'd you expect?

[Eye of the What]

haha!

that made me smile. i loved how the "what" moved with the beat at the beginning. the drawings were sloppy, but I think you meant for that. the smilies in the back were trippy and nonsensical, but in a good way.

good work.

ZopNone responds:

EYE OF THE TIGER

[New Year's Flash '09]

Nicely done

A great look at the new year. Consistently well styled. Loved how the camera followed the drawing. Happy 09 to you!

Kyjast responds:

Thanks! Happy New Year!

[~SA:ChristmasBattleParty~]

you've got talent

but i didn't have the stamina. i really tried to watch it all the way through, but it wasn't going anywhere.

and srsly, the whole "i don't have any good ideas, so i'll just make my flash about not having any good ideas" theme is boring. i don't really care that you're acknowledging this fact; it still comes off as unprepared.

SpikeVallentine responds:

thanks for your honesty! appreciate it!

yeah, there wasn't really a begining middle or end. but i gotta admit this is amaaaazing practice for storytelling and animation. thanks for your time!